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STampsboss Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2017   General Artist
Do you have a cover for this story?
like how books have a cover?
StickFreeks Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2017  Professional General Artist
Not yet! I have a few in mind, though. :D
MathildasDoubel Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2016
You asked for some critique for your comic, so here's what I think.
You take a little sideblow on genre typical clichées here and there and  yourely on slapstick while still taking some more deeper things into a account. It's funny that you often introduce characters in a pretty clichée way so that the reader expects a clichée and then you slowly show that the character isn't really fitting the genre typical expectations for this type of character (theo for example). I also want to note,  that I'm terrible with names, but it was still easy for for me to remember who's who, which is something a lot of shojo manga don't accomplish. so, good job on that.

you've got a good feeling for page/reading flow and the style in general fits the humour  of the story pretty well (a very realistic way to draw, like Obata for example, wouldn't fit the plot at all). the further you go with the pages the more dynamic the characters are drawn, which gives it a nice energetic feel.  Though stylised  and so not meant to be totally  realistic, I still think you can improve on anatomy a bit to make the character look a bit smoother. But generally it's nothing that's disturbing the reading flow.
I'm not saying much about the line quality of the pencil drawings, since I assume you're planning on cleaning them up at some point.
some pages are a bit difficult to read on one side of the page though. they're a bit blurry  like they are not scanned properly. if you're using these as a blue print for your pages, I'd consider rescanning them.

for the coloured pages.
to be frank i think the lines need work. Sadly compared to the sketches, they lose a bit in dynamic, which is something that happens to a lot of artists, when they go from sketch to finished artwork. It doesn't make it less readable, but it could be improved to make the page look more professional and less scribbly (unless you're going for that, then just ignore my rambling ;)).
I think it would look better if the lines were cleaner...less lines intersecting each other and some are a little shaky. I don't know which program you're using, but perhaps either working in a bigger format or try using a program with a line stabiliser to make them a bit smoother...or both. perhaps also think about colouring the lines instead of leaving them just black, like you did on the first coloured page in the 4rth panel. I think it would fit well with the colouring.
Like the lines,the colouring is also a bit "scribbly" and as long as you don't planned it this way I consider cleaning things up a bit. Perhaps stylising the shadows more and going more in the direction of cellshading, would improve the look and make it possible for you to colour things faster.
You choose colours well, though I think  you can work with a bigger value range and a bigger variation in terms of saturation (try working with less saturated areas in the background and put the higher contrast in saturation, detail and value on the main focal point of your panel, i.e. the characters). You can also try to work with atmosphere colours a bit more...I personally think it looks more harmonious.

I think it is fun to read, the characters are relatable. there are some thing you could improve on, but they're not that bad...I really liked reading this. please keep on working.
StickFreeks Featured By Owner Edited Oct 24, 2016  Professional General Artist
Oh my goodness, thank you so much for your critique! :happybounce:

I'm happy to hear that you like it and I appreciate your honesty on the artwork. I fully agree that anatomy, value, and linework are not my fortes, so I'll keep practicing those and try to improve the quality / smoothness. :XD:
I'll also try to work on retaining the dynamicism, because I definitely don't want to lose that! It's been hard for me to know what to work on specifically, so thank you for pointing those things out. I'll also have to play around with colored lines... in the past I've found them to be quite a hassle, but maybe I could try some new techniques and see how they look compared to the black.

Heheh, The scans are kind of terrible mainly because I'm scanning from a fully-bound book and can't lay the pages flat, so there's not much I can do about that. I do retrace the words if they get blurred out though. ^^;

Could I ask you if you had a favorite part or character? I'm keeping a mental poll. :meow: 

Thank you again!~
MathildasDoubel Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2016
No problem. :)
I kinda liked the Pinguin ( because it's a pinguin, duh!). the  female main was interesting, because she seemed very classical in design but then she was always good for a surprise. I'm sure if if I like the male main yet, but character wise he is not a bad for the story, in my opinion, the same for the fox.
HawkytheCat Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2016
The comic is looking good so far.
Flowerpowerlovesgood Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015  Student Artist
I love your video and comics and your art 
StickFreeks Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015  Professional General Artist
Thank you so much!~ :squee:
ScottaHemi Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This looks like a fun comic series :D  interesting idea behind it! and really nice artwork :)
barneyjones123 Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
and when are you going to release the last 20 pages its like its been 3 years now.
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